Hello readers,
Today I am going to talk to you about my writing
This is what I have written.
In somesberg sam hunt is a hero “oh no it’s 90:00 zathaday I need to hide before a zathadon finds me” I said needing “hold on I’m sa oof” “squawk” “no I'm trapped hold on, Laser Vision“! zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzp “alright now I just need the brain to make another reboot system (later on) at sam’s house “ah there we go I've finished the reboot system now i just need 20 robots”.
Hello Sean.
ReplyDeleteWOW!you have used some very interesting words.Your work is intense and scary.I would love for you to add to this, so I know what is going to happen with the 20 robots.
Just remember to use capital letters for people's names.
Keep up the blogging!. Have a great weekend.
Hi Sean!
ReplyDeleteGreat planning and wonderful dialogue and punctuation.
Your next step is to:
1. Carefully separate your story back into the event boxes. ( This is so you can add details to each section without out getting them confused.) Hint: Rewatch the video to see how I model this.
2. Expand on the details so that your readers know what happens on Zathaday. ( eg. I am running through the forest. Where is a place I can hide? I hear large wings beating above me and a loud 'Whooosh!' ) This helps create a picture in your readers head of what is happening.
Kind regards,
Miss D
Hello Sean.
ReplyDeleteI hope you had a great weekend.
If I had laser vision,what could I do with it?.
I can't wait to see more of your work.Take care and have a great week.
Hi Miss Cassidy I have had a great weekend how was yours,
Deletewith laser vision you could be a hero you could cut a big hole for the villain to get trapped in bye.
Hi Sean,O wow! So many new words to get my head around.I think you are enjoying narrative writing. Have you read any of Sam Hunt's writing or just heard about him? I will look forward to where the story takes us next.
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